Delicate
By Chinobus
Sat, 25 Feb 2012
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All together am I right now, iron-clad will bound, wound around ambitions,
Then collapsed when facing mere darting thoughts, caught in the spindled mind.
Tightly knitting the crystal essence of elusive hope, cope to forget whats gone.
The greatest act appearing strong yet capable, inescapable weaknessess.
Examine the frail nature of my shattered soul, goal to find eyes that are kind.
Faced with the opposition of a formidible foe, know that I will break in time.
Do I dare to continue these raging bouts of livid insanity, continuity of colission,
Realizing in the end my vaporous fate rings true, pulling apart Im feeling fine.
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I like the immediacy of
Permalink Submitted by london_calling79 on
I like the immediacy of this. Hope you don't mind me pointing out that there are a few apostrophe errors - or are they deliberate? It does feel like a few choice lines put together - not in a negative way!
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Great poem, Chinobus and I
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Great poem, Chinobus and I agree with london calling, it certainly does have 'immedicacy'.
Tina
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