Lunchtime in the cafeteria

By summerlands

Wed, 31 Oct 2012
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I live in salt water.
It erodes my skin cells,
Peels backwards through my muscles.
While drifting eyes in the slipstream watch

It grinds downwards through my bones
Which fall away
So that I can't gesture madly
That they are all, every one of them, depleting too.

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Submitted by scratch on
I like the degradation, the dissolving of everything. I think that it's a strong piece of writing indeed greenelephants. I would love to see this poem extended to another stanza, just to underscore the cracking imagery on show. Thanks for sharing a wonderful poem.

 

Submitted by summerlands on
Thank you so much scratch! That's the feeling I was trying to soak through it. It's really nice of you to say :) and great username, I might add!