Rock Steady

By Highhat

Sat, 13 Apr 2013
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17 comments
 

This boulder rests on a fraction
but can it be tipped
to topple downhill,
calving a landslide?
Will you lean and
rest your weary body
against this age-old stone?
The layers of sediment
attached to an eternity,
impervious to time.
Will you , unwittingly, seek it’s support
as ghostly mists conceal the path?
Trace and stroke the grain,
lifting the scheme from the
spurious and inanimate dregs.
With a heartbeat, the solid rhythm
Fighting, rock steady and secure.
This is the dream
that kills time.

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Comments

Submitted by littleditty on
Really like this poem - It's rock solid airy and fine, a fine write :)

 

Submitted by celticman on
It's quite enigmatic Pia. 'Trace and stroke the grain,'is my favourite line.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks Littleditty-really pleased you liked it ;)Pia

Submitted by Highhat on
I do write enigmatic stuff I think Celtic- but thanks for reading. glad you liked that line, it's fine yes. ;)Pia

Submitted by The Walrus on
Nice one, Pia. Many years ago ago my friend took me on a hike in the peak district and showed me a boulder as big as a car on the top of a rocky crag, it was so precariously balanced you could rock it. Another time, when we were perhaps twelve years old, we climbed a crumbling cliff face in Wales and inadvertently caused a slight landslide - a boulder about three feet across went bouncing down the hill narrowly missing a car on the road seventy odd feet below - if it had hit it I guess everyone inside would have died.

Submitted by Highhat on
Amazing Walrus- yes that they can balance like that without toppling. I can just picture the rock causing a landslide- phew lucky! Thanks for stopping by my little pome. An avalanche is snow and ice isn't it? Perhaps I should have written landslide come to think of it??? ;)Pia

Submitted by VeraClark on
This has got dynamite force. Such detail and perfectly placed language. A delightful read.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
That is a very encouraging comment Vera- I'm so glad you enjoyed this and thank you for commenting. ;)Pia

Submitted by KPHVampireWriter on
Hi, Pia, the images you paint are brilliantly emotive. I also read into it the precarious balance of a relationship...a longing to be needed, 'the dream that kills time'...But that's probably just me.

Submitted by Highhat on
That was very clever Vampire- you're very close- thank you for being so perceptive and telling me about it. ;)Pia

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
I agree with Vera's comment, Pia, almost word for word. A well written poem, indeed. Tina;-)

 

Submitted by moonphish on
beautiful poem...yes, even the most sturdy seeming things can shift without warning :) - alvin

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks Tina and Alvin. ;)Pia

Submitted by Highhat on
That's the good thing about interpretation- it's solely up to the reader. I am glad for your words on this and that you gave it so much thought. Thank you Magicdarer. I'll leave the religious theme up to you. ;)Pia

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
To me this poem read, as trusting on the support of something you can't be sure of, but going with your gut instincts. Hope you didn't mind my interpretation. I always love the labyrinth of your poems Pia. Jenny.

 

Submitted by hudsonmoon on
Will you lean and rest your weary body against this age-old stone? My particular favorite line, Pia. Rich x

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks Jenny and Rich. I appreciate you reading and am glad you both enjoyed my little effort here. ;)Pia