An Impulsive Encounter

By Suchitra Manpuri

Sun, 10 Sep 2017
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Trickling water from the hose,
Bleeding from my bloody nose,
Washing off to not to claim any trace,
To show how wonderful could be my face.

Having an image of myself to represent,
People prodding me to be reticent,
Disagreement makes them very furious,
I had to settle by being dubious.

Dolled up by putting what is not,
Inserting my neck into a hangman's knot,
Kicking what is underneath,
I fall into an enticing grave beneath.

Certificate PG
Poem
Surreal

Comments

Submitted by london_calling79 on

Some very strong vocabulary and a great last line. Not sure the 'pushing me to be reticent' line make sense and no need for the 'very' either but all in all quite a strong piece!

 

Submitted by Suchitra Manpuri on

Hey london_calling79,

Thanks a lot for the feedback, I seriously need to work on this piece!