Autobiography (but not mine!)

Gold cherry
Poem of the week

By Rhiannonw

Sat, 06 Jan 2024
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20 comments
 

I buzzed round in the cloud, clung to some of my kind
but one day we gathered in big groups, to bind
together, and then when quite heavy enough,
we dropped through the sky
down, down to the earth
with others to lie
forming such aggregates, puddles, and flooding,
before
we soaked, dripped, dropped,
seeped right into the ground
to restore
its wetness, and now I abide
but soon I may find
a root grow to touch me and suck me inside,
and the pull from the leaves may draw me up
to where they may use me, and break me up
to form their growth-sugars:
Will that be my end?
Well, if that plant’s eaten
I may be remade
when an animal burns up its food
to release
energy and me (or my like)
(once more in one piece),
to get sent back to earth or up to the sky
where one day, I
(or my like)
may again join a cloud, and …

(IP: past, present and future – possibly one was supposed to include the words, but I read it as a topic prompt)

 

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Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

What an interesting IP response Rhiannon - and as always you can use the Inspiration Point in any way you choose, though I meant for people to use all three 'things' rather than the exact words, which is exactly what you've done!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks. I hoped it would give some humour aswell as depicting the interesting trail! Idea came in the middle of the night, but wasn't sure how quickly it would work out clearly.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks for the cherries. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by D G Moody on

I liked this, the wau you've taken the element and shown how it returns to where it came from.

Dougie Moody

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, it was a bit of fun trying to get it compact and readable! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by rjnewlyn on

This is our Facebook and Twitter Pick of the Day! Please share/retweet if you like it.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Oh, thank you! Glad you like it. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Turlough on

I really like this. I like the way you've highlighted how water is used over and over again in nature; many times in the past and many times in the future, as well as here and now.

Turlough

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you. Glad it was clear in the end. A different way to highlight it! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by marandina on

"..we soaked, dripped, dropped,
seeped right into the ground
to restore
its wetness,"

A perfect circle described so beautifully. There's a deftness to this that makes the poem so readable. Just lovely, Rhiannon. Paul

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Oh, thank you, much appreciated! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Penny4athought on

Autobiography of a water droplet, a brilliant take on the water cycle and a well written poem. I enjoyed the journey and philosophical thoughts from the droplet.

Will that be my end?
Well, if that plant’s eaten
I may be remade
when an animal burns up its food
to release
energy and me (or my like),

Excellent choice for POD!smiley

 

Penny4athought

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Actually it was the 'voice' of one molecule of H20 I had in mind, clustering together in small droplets in the cloud, joining up with others to becomie bigger droplets so they fall, then in puddles on the ground, but the molecules being broken up in the chemistry of the leaf!! (and water molecules reformed in the energy processes of the animmal cell!) Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Penny4athought on

A voice of a molecule, fascinating poem Rhiannon.smiley

Penny4athought

Submitted by onemorething on

This is our Poem of the Week! Congratulations! 

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Wow, that 's a surprise! Thank  you and glad you enjoyed it and  how it worked out! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

Very big congratulations from me too Rhiannon - very well deserved!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you very much! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Kris on

Sincerely captured me....... every drop..... + I'm cloud guy.. always looking up there... angel

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you! Lovely clouds! (except when very dark! and then the rainbows can show up well) Rhiannon