I wasn't expecting that

By Deliberately Evolving

Wed, 23 Sep 2015
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You've got me stumped,
my darling I'm 
voiceless,
baffled,
perplexed and puzzled.
I was lost for words,
all I can do is ponder,
dwell a bit longer
on what you said,
can't really comment.
My own words 
can't seem to express,
the effect 
and
in fact 
I think I...
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Comments

Submitted by EB on

Nothing concrete to go on in this, the mind boggles. And that seems to be the the point of the piece. I do think it might be helpful to leave clues though. 

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Thanks for commenting. Yes it was really just a silly piece I thought on the top of my head - when someone says something so out there that you don't know what to say back but you try to anyway. 

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Bee on

Leaves you wondering what on earth was said. You get the narrators disbelief and speechlessness. How do you write a speechless poem without saying anything? Like this. Well done!

Bee

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Thanks Bee. I'm glad it worked. I'm often used to being speechless so I guess I can identify easily with it. 

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by alice sunderland on

you leave us hanging here. i dont mind that though - a bit 'mysterious' suits me. lovely stuff.

 

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Thanks for taking the time to comment. I'm glad you liked it 

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.