turfed

By a.lesser.thing

Wed, 08 May 2013
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4 comments
 

forced from
their homes,
possessions taken
simply to watch the
glow dull.

hate,
instilled,
killed millions.
seventeen, all
in all, is what they
predicted.

gassed
or lashed,
taken sick
or overworked
to the point of death;
they watched and laughed
at the brash love and loss
of human parasites.

they say
that eventually
phoenixes will rise
from ashes. i hope the
same is true about
humans.

Certificate 12
Poem
Historical Fiction

Comments

Submitted by littleditty on
could cut 'that eventually' - and I was wondering about a semi-colon after point of death as narrative voice seems to change there, but i'm not sure your meaning (brash love and loss of..) after, so..! Anyhow, big topic, and yes, they do!and yes it is :)

 

Submitted by a.lesser.thing on
I added the semi-colon; you're right, it definitely fits there! And I meant the 'brash love and loss of' to symbolize what the Nazis saw it as, or their thoughts on it, etc. I kept 'that eventually' because I wanted to symbolize that the ashes have lost certain factors, died in battle, etc. Plus, it makes the words roll off the tongue a bit better. Thank you for the feedback! :) I'm definitely hoping that it is true.

 

Submitted by littleditty on
I like the idea of phoenix for all - rebirth, renewal anyway..More specifically, my parents went to a club called Phoenix, they were wee phoenixes! Me too, my poem Holocaust Stone - Hyde park April 15th is about my family -have a looksie when you get a mo...

 

Submitted by a.lesser.thing on
Read it in the car and loved it--might comment on it when I get some time! Gonna head off to the hotel's pool now.