there once was a kingdom

I know very little about poetry so can't really give you much in the way of constructive feedback regarding style, form etc. It's good that you have the confidence to post your work here and I hope you continue to do so. However, if you would like others to review your work on a regular basis then may I suggest you also review others' work on a regular basis. By doing that then I'm sure more people would be only too glad to offer more constructive critiques on your poetry than what I'm capable of. What does stand out for me though is the number of spelling mistakes. If I can offer any advice it would be to try and use a spell checker on your work before posting. Written English can be such a difficult language to master but I'm sure you'll get the hang of it the more you do it. Practice makes perfect, as they say. Anyway, keep writing as much as you can and remember that if you want others to review your work then spend time doing likewise. Very best of luck.

I'm not a poet either, but I'd echo oldpesky's point about getting engaged with other work on the site. As well as the spelling issues, I think it would be worth thinking carefully about how you structure the lines - where you end them, what punctuation you want to use. For example, did you want the reader to pause between 'mother' and 'natures' because that's what they would naturally do when the line ends and rhythm is always important in poetry - even if it's free verse and unstructured. I hope that's of some help. I liked the early morning atmosphere in this and the 'kingdom like heaven' echo of the title. Do keep writing and good luck with it. Rob