The fierce Monster

By Rachel Mbulwa Mangeli

Fri, 18 Jan 2008
  • 637 reads
2 comments
 

The fierce Monster

Violence is a monster
A Monster that devours
All people tremble
On the mention of it
It gobbles, even the mighty

When Violence strikes
With its Wide mouth
Oh no, with its filthy hands and huge feet
Don’t dare, oh yes
Don’t dare open for it
It will destroy the world

Close all your doors and windows
All the entrances to your house
Such that Violence, does not rule
Stand guard, with all the good weapons

Peace is the strongest Weapon
Love follow suit
Energize yourself with Prayer, Faith is
Amour of prosperity
Sincerity pays a great deal, and above all
Exercise Unity

Certificate U
Poem
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by Sooz006 on
This poem seems to have a bit of an identity crisis on its hands. It begins childlike, as though it's written for a child's market. A monster that gobbles with a wide mouth and huge feet, is either symbolically sexual or intended for kids. But the messge that the poem is sendingo out is a very adult theme and one that would have to be greatly simplified for a child to understand. I think you need to decide wherre you want this poem to lie and make it sit in one genre or the other. With a few little tweaks I think it will work well and be a good poem.

 

Submitted by Rachel Mbulwa M... on
I find your comments very encouraging.When i wrote the poem, I had in mind that everybody understand violence,regardless of age.Thank you so much for the advice.