KISS

Gold cherry

By Bee

Sat, 23 Aug 2014
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18 comments
 

I tasted white chocolate 
and a breath of sea, reminiscent 
of champagne bubbles 
that made me giggle,

fine wine that made me cry for more, 
knowing there could never be enough 
to satisfy my thirst; the yearning in my heart
to savour a moment forever.

A brush of lips, small fingers 
that pressed petals on my neck 
and the healing palms imprinted
there before you left will never fade.

I've flown sky high because of you
and swung on strings of stars, 
doting in a temporary heaven

before floating back to earth, proud
of your eventual independence.
But what would I give to turn back time 
and do it all again... X

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Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

This is beautiful Bee - (one tiny typo with champagne spelling)

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks so much for the spellcheck, Ins. I didn't notice. And thank you for reading and letting me know you liked. I'm really pleased.

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you for the cherries, too.

Bee

Submitted by Geoff Smith on

It's really enjoyable and accessible. Do you mean 'what would I give' ?

The idea of them growing up is scary.

Thanks for reading. I am grateful for your time.

Submitted by Bee on

Hi jasper - it is scary, but exciting as well. And I've edited the mistake. Thank you so much.

Bee

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Bee

Beautiful story poem. I like the way you give a little glimpse into your thoughts and feelings without being specific.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Jean.

Bee

Submitted by Ed Crane on

the wishes of all loving parents. You have summarised this wish in a very eloquent way. It brought a lump to my old throat.

Good work. Bee.

Ed x

(been away for a week ... just back)

 

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Ed, glad you are back - and thank you for such lovely comments and encouragement.

x

Bee

Submitted by hudsonmoon on

Beautiful, Deborah. Truly. And congrats on pick of the day. Well deserved.

Rich

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks so much Rich. X

Bee

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

So lovely, you summon up sweet memories.

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Philip.

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

So thrilled when I saw golden cherries! Thank you, and wow!!!

Bee

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Wow indeed, Bee, and well deserved too. A fine and delicate poem expressing bitter-sweet feelings of past togetherness and the inevitable separation plus the realisation that, alas, tempus fugit.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you very much, Luigi - so pleased you liked.

Bee

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

How could I have missed this poem Bee?  Simply adorable...an intimate moment captured in this beautiful poem that had me almost welling up,  being the sensitive natured person that I am.

I can only say congrats on those lovely gold cherries,  they're well deserved.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you Jenny - really appreciate you reading, and your lovely comments.

Bee