Nocturnal ignorance

You must have been in a dark place when you wrote this Beeme. 'stripping… each photograph to their bones. No colour’s remain, to mimic a memory' The images I got from those lines were immense. X Pinda

Hi there, Beeme. Basically, this is very good. Just a few suggestions below:- "...each photograph to their bones", might be better, "each photograph to its bones". Makes a nice internal rhyme with 'mimic' a line below. Also, the word 'buried' would be way more effective on the line by itself. And in that last line, maybe change 'in a blacked room' to 'in a blackened room'. And, last but not least, colour's is not a possessive, but a plural...in this case anyway, so doesn't need an apostrophe. As pinda says, the imagery here is powerful, and you very successfully suck the reader in to a very dark place indeed. Tina xx

This is great now, Beeme;-) Tina xx

It's edgy and disturbing but very effective I think. A lot contained in a few words. Very good. Rob

Love the images of the walls and photographs! Truly haunting - well done on the cherry! Magic xxx