Shocks 1,2,3

By Beeme

Sat, 06 Jun 2009
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10 comments
 

All of these emotions
are so wobbly, and
they are never cautious
and they never stop and
they never think.
The only secretary is that
I can write all that I feel.
My hands can just about
support broken emotion
and tears only wet the paper
and blur some words,
Added defect
So lost and confused
by everything you do
and shock after
shock another limb
falls from my body
and shock after shock
another piece of my
heart sinks in cold
un-moved blood.
And shock after
shock I care less
and less about
me and more about
the terrible effects
that happen to me
instead of to you and
to her.

Certificate U
Poem
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by Lennie on
I really love this poem, I can feel your emotions in this one, i really like reading your work becuase it inspires me to do some more of my own, love Lennie x

Lennie

Submitted by Beeme on
Thankyou Lennie, im glad you enjoy my work (:

k.

Submitted by Ewan on
I quite enjoyed the surreal couplet, 'The only secretary is that I can write all that I feel.'

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Submitted by Beeme on
Thankyou Ewan , im glad you enjoyed it. Beeme

k.

Submitted by pinda on
Beeme,first time I commented on your work and must admit I think your a great writer. Only recently noticed you,not that I think your rubbish.It's I tend to look at writers work,who I know on this site(If you know what I mean).So I been keeping a eye out for your work.Once I read the doors of the angel,Enough go eat your own skin and this.I had to comment. Your a master with words and you got talent!..I'm officially a regular viewer of your work now. Expect a comment on every peice of yours I see :) Peace x

Submitted by pinda on
P.s. The only secretary is that I can write all that I feel. My hands can just about support broken emotion and tears only wet the paper and blur some words, Added defect That is true man,I can relate to that sometimes

Submitted by Beeme on
Thats really great, I have commented on afew of your work and I regulary check your uploads.I really enjoy your work (: Im really pleased that you have enjoyed my work; cos thats what it's all about. (a master of words, what a great compliment !!) Much appreciated Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by Beeme on
And yes many times I feel like, my poetry out weighs my emotions lol

k.

Submitted by Curse of 222 on
well, beeme, you have certainly continued your evolution as a poet. this piece is emotionally raw and powerful. a very good read. good job jason

jason

Submitted by Beeme on
Thankyou Jason, im glad you enjoyed my work. Beeme

k.