Ambush

Cherry

By celticman

Wed, 14 Oct 2015
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6 comments
 

If you don’t get by

Don’t ask why

Maybe next year

Shift your feet

Move on

Can’t you see?

Work harder

Become like me

Cleanse the dust

Sunny side up

You belong to me

And your raggedy kids

On that we can agree

We’ll watch they grow

Half-baked now

Don’t be alarmed

It’s been a bad year

Free?

People like you

Need told what to do

Creep on

Keep movin’

We’ll be in touch

No right-thinking man

Needs shoulder the blame

It’s the system my friend

Exploiting a trend

There ain’t no appeal

None of this is real

We’ll be watchin’

Come again

Thanks for shopping

Come again.

Thanks for shopping

Come again. 

Certificate PG
Poem
Rant

Comments

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Very clever use of all the phrases we hear like these arranged into this structure. Such a very apt picture of our society - love the repetition at the end, it brings such beautiful emphasis to it.

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by love_writing on

I agree, the ending has such a robotic- like sound to it and portrays our consumer driven society well. 

love_writing

Submitted by celticman on

thanks love_writing and accidentally exiting (there's a story in combing your two names). Poetic even. 

 

Submitted by Pat G on

The remorseles pace adds to a sense of cruelty and despair. The cynical "my friend" is a clincher.

Submitted by celticman on

sadly, it is a cynical business, selling fear. cheers for readnig Pat. 

 

Submitted by celticman on

the most successful product sold is fear. One statisic this week didn't shock me but confirmed what I already knew. 70% of those in 'temporary' (we know what temp can mean) have been threatend with the sack for taking a day off due to illness.