only you

Cherry

By celticman

Sun, 28 Dec 2014
  • 865 reads
9 comments
 

Sunlight lacks warmth

Light without you

Forget loyalty and respect

Dark rise of swollen belly in our bed

Glimmering embers of what we said

Love gone to seed

Hunger for another soul

Tomorrow Tomorrow Tomorrow

Add one more

Cast off to a distant shore

Murmur of voices from afar

Heart beating in my head

I have no regrets

We are not alone.

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Comments

Submitted by Geoff Smith on

I really like this. It's somehow direct and oblique at the same time, which sounds incredibly pretentious,  but's the best I got. Oh and the Macbeth reference in the middle is pretty neat too.

Thanks for reading. I am grateful for your time.

Submitted by celticman on

just a little rhyme that passes the time. Cheers Jasper. 

 

Submitted by scratch on

'Darknesses (Darkness's or Darkness' I think, if you intend to describe the dark as having ownership) swollen belly in our bed'.

I really like it.

 

Submitted by celticman on

thanks scratch. darkness falls away. 

 

Submitted by scratch on

I wish that it would.

 

Submitted by celticman on

it does (groan). 

 

Submitted by Sooz006 on

Your getting very poetic me auld lad. Liked the words and the phraseology. Liked the lit and the pensiveness of it, but didn't really understand the story. So often the  case with me and poetry. I'm torn between mistress while the cat's away .. and pregnant partner.  Three reads isn't giving much away, but I am thick. and that's the beauty of poetry the words can still be beautiful and meaningful to the reader even if they use their own interpretation and don't really know where the writer's mind was. 

 

Submitted by Sooz006 on

And damn you, I'll be singing, Only You, all night now. 

 

Submitted by celticman on

only you is a good starter, but I don''t know how or when it finishes. I don't understand poetry either, but hey who cares.