a life in a breath

By Coolhermit

Wed, 25 Nov 2020
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a life in a breath
 
occasioned by Thomas Hardy Thoughts of Phena (1890)
 
that delicate essence captured
in a bottle meant for mourning tears
wakens sunshine lotus memories: 
the temple garden we discovered
neglected in a forest thicket
and visited at green-mist daybreak
 
our endless days of wine and loving
stretching like wild-horse open prairies,
violin sonatas at hotel windows
blessing Lake Constanza waters
a raft of memories before…
that pain-wracked long goodbye we togethered
 
her fragrance, still lingers, in a flask for weeping, 
but not a trace more,
‘not a line of her writing - not a thread of her hair.’
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Comments

Submitted by Nolan on

Much of your writing seems to be very academic. In anycase you are obviously very talented.

All the best, Nolan

 

Submitted by Coolhermit on

I'm an Essex boy - I can do vulgar smiley 

I delve into my docs files and lucky dip - whatever turns up is given a once-over. This was today's.

I'm not at all academic but I do love good poetry, good words, inspired/inspirational writing - something that elicits an emotional response and, sadly, there is precious little of it about these days. 

Rick

 

Submitted by Nolan on

Yes now your methods sound like baking pancakes &

 

Submitted by Coolhermit on

I know a little about creating poetry and nothing about baking - for the former the key is editing editing editing - rooting out tautologies and ironing clunky lines  - as far as baking goes, I'm aware of my oven but after 15 years have yet to use it  smiley

Rick

 

Submitted by Nolan on

I found the key to creative writing is not to take yourself too seriously. Get the idea of the oven but you can use it for a heater in winter.

Cheers Rick take it easy! &&