Sacrifice

Cherry

By cormacru999

Fri, 07 Oct 2011
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Sacrifice –

It should start with
A piano
Quiet somber notes
To pull at your heart
Then time goes by so fast
& it’s been months since
I saw you last
And while time has passed
I’ve been bargaining
With the gods
I’ve made promises
While you’ve been gone
No more late nights
Together
No more human touch
No more gazing into
Your golden eyes
Instead I stare at the sun
& hope to go blind
I told them I understand now
Sacrifice is what they crave
So I will give up on Love
No more holding you
In the gale of the world
We will both be swept away
Never to fall again
It should end with cymbals and drums
With the sound of rain
& thunder
As the god themselves weep
Over the strength
Of my sacrifice.

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Comments

Submitted by Highhat on
Very sad. But very good. I enjoyed reading. ;)Pia

Submitted by cormacru999 on
yeah, I write sad stuff most often. it reflects how I feel often. I'm glad you liked it.

Nicholas Schoonbeck

Submitted by ScoZen on
Nice. "...Instead I stare at the sun & hope to go blind..." Hope not cormacru, we won't get to read any more poetry and, you will no longer be able to see your cherries
ScoZen

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi cormacru, It's amazing how the way we feel comes out in our poems, but you have so much to offer and I think your work is perrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrfect!. You are really gifted...as in this poem. Jenny.

 

Submitted by cormacru999 on
Thanks Jenny. Its really great to get good feedback, makes my tough days much better.

Nicholas Schoonbeck

Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
This is absolutely heartbreaking and stunning at the same time. Such an effective opening and I loved this section: "Your golden eyes Instead I stare at the sun & hope to go blind" You're very gifted.

 

Submitted by cormacru999 on
Thank you! yeah I write dark stuff, but I'm Irish and feel a deep melancholy most of the time.

Nicholas Schoonbeck