Love Lost - Love Regained!

By Denzella

Thu, 26 Sep 2013
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Love Lost – Love Regained!

A heart that loved was all I asked for,
But it was not enough you wanted more.
You threw open your heart and let me in,
But fiery passions still slept deep within.

You said a love like ours was hard to find,
And jealousy like mine was just a state of mind.
So I spring cleaned my heart of all the pain,
In the hope this would please you once again. 

But still you planned to make a fresh start,
Though you knew I hated us being apart.
I had a feeling that one day you might leave,
So I tried removing my heart from my sleeve.

Still I pleaded guilty what more can I say,
You cheated on me so you had to pay.
But the judge didn’t like the look of me,
So threw the book despite my guilty plea.

I will serve my time as I know I must,
But afraid this new love will turn to dust.
Although I am now full of repentance,
It will make no difference to my sentence.

To kill a cheating lover is a crime,
And I know I will have to serve my time.
Even though I am now full of remorse,
The fact remains; the cheat is now a corpse.

My faith in love you set out to restore,
And it is true I love once more.
Your heart opened to let me in,
But fiery passion still lies within.

A loving heart leaves no room for hate,
Anything less would be to desecrate
What we have even though still new.
Imprisoned though I am, please, be true.

Who would love me in the way you do,
Making it easy for me to love you too!
But if your intention is to toss aside,
My love that flows freely from deep inside,

Then you will be lost to me forever,
Please, you must not say it, no, not ever!

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Submitted by Linda Wigzell Cress on

A nice story that flows along well.  I liked the verse near the end that starts  'A loving heart...'. The rhythm and rhymes here are excellent.  Really good poem Moya, and well done on mastering the single spacing.  I will give your method as described in the Forum a try soon!

Linda

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Linda,

I think it probably still needs work but I wanted to try out the suggestion from Admin so that was why I put it up.Thank you for the read and the encouraging comment.

Moya

 

Submitted by Bee on

I found this a strange but compelling read. Think it was the subject woking against the rhyme that made it different - (in a good way), and I liked the way you've explored the possibilities.

Enjoyed.

 

Bee

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Bee,

Thank you for the read and comment  and yes I agree it is strange.  I don't know where it came from and I don't really know where it is going or raather was going.

Moya

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

A poingnant poem from you Moya.  I can tell you worked hard on this one and it shows.  Not an easy subject to tackle,  but you managed to convey the feelings well and very poetically.  Jenny.

 

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Jenny,

Thank  you for the read and the comment.  It's funny but I never thought I could write poetry good or bad and yet I find it very satisfying. 

 

Hope Dawlish is holding up.  Need to get reading again.  I haven't done much  of anybody's yet so will probably not write anything for a bit to catch up.

Moya

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

You really gave this one all you've got, Moya, and it sure  paid off.  Hats off to you,  and that single line spacing sure is enviable. 

More than well done, and I really did enjoy reading it.

Tina

 

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Tina,

Thanks for the read and comment.  Look on the forum for admin's solution to the single spacing saga.  As you can see it worked for  me

I must stop writing in alliteravtive sentences.

Moya

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Hullo, Moya, I hope your night was reasonable in the end.
I have been back to this a couple of times to see around the first catastophic 'love' and the second hopeful, tentative love. You certainly bring out the danger again of playing around with people's emotions and tossing away committment in unfaithfulness. 'A loving heart leaves no room for hate', but love hurt can turn to hate, I guess.

Thought-provoking.
Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Rhiannon,

Thank you for the read and the comment.  As usual you read with such perception that sometimes you get there before I do.  Your comment 'but love hurt can turn to hate,' is an example of just that.

Thank you once again,

Moya

 

Submitted by misskelizabeth on

Hello Moya,

thought it was about time I came across your page again and quite frankly I'm glad I did.

This is a brillant read, if not a true story it sounds you've written it with true passion and I like it very much!

thanks for the great poem, Kate.

 

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Kate,

 

Thank you for the read and the kind comment.  I'm glad you liked  it.  I must pop over to your page soon as I HAVEN'T BEEN THERE IN A WHILE.  sORRY ABOUT THE CAPITALS.  i'M NOT SHOUTING i PROMISE.  hIYT WRONG KEYS.

mOYA

 

Submitted by Art of the Diver on

Oh Moya... how sad.. but on the upside, at least you can still publish works like this from within those grey walls and we, your readers are richer for your crime... take care [seems so lost for the ocassion]  yes

Submitted by Denzella on

Oh Rob,

How nice of you to read and comment on my poem. I'm no great poet but I supopose I'm not too bad at prose.  However, I enjoy any type of writing except novels. When I tried to write one on a subject I knew well it just didn't work.  I thought the object of writing a novel was that the reader wouldn't be able to put it down.  I seem to have the dubious distinction of writing a book no one could be persuaded to pick up.

Keep 'em coming Rob!

Moya