First Walk Of April

Cherry

By Di_Hard

Thu, 04 Apr 2019
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6 comments
 

Step on a moon stone to cross the stream -

Van Gogh’s Starry Night - willow flowers

pollen halo’d in swirling water.dark.

 

Sun-coin's cloud-pursed. In lambent air, all

colours quicken, shine : evening's golden

syrup hanging from a silver spoon.

 

Soft rush-reaches, an upturned brush, bleached

peach. Gorse lava bursts through field-seams, far

and near while paisley moss, lush dark green

 

over lime and old orange,  rain rich

shawls path free and up slender birches’

opal trunks where turquoise lichen clings

 

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Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Very rich.The growth and colours increasing, returning. 

I liked the first verse especially, with the comparison of the pollened willow catkins to his stars . and Sun-coin's cloud-pursed

Still mulling over the syrup and the spoon sparkling in evening light! Rhiannon

(should there be an 'a' in 'seems' of 'land-seems'?)

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou very much for your comment, and the spell check Rhiannon! It is rather a lot of mixerd metaphors. The flowers are like small pussy willows but the trees are much more lax and low? I think the rain had bashed some off

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Some wonderful expressive pleasing narratives Di. Had natures bohemian feel to it as I read.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou for your lovely comment, Jenny. In Spring going out of your front door is like opening a treasure chest, isn't it?

 

Submitted by fatboy74 on

This is bursting with life. Particularly fond of soft rush reaches an upturned brush bleached pink. Really enjoyed.

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou for your lovely comment FB! Was not sure that bit had worked. My cat deleted the whole thing first time (had one line to go) and I couldn't get it back or remember it except for the Van Gogh bit (my fault, she does do this sometimes and I should have copied it after every line but forgot. Jeremy Corbyn would be much better) and I couldn't remember how it had gone. She's trying to put her tail up my nose as I type...

It means so much your opinion, thankyou