H is for Holly (for sale and for song)

Cherry

By Di_Hard

Tue, 07 Dec 2021
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10 comments
 

Tied wild tamed by gold spray

fussily ossified

 

bright red in gloss green sway

where feasting blackbirds ride

Certificate U
Poem
Advent Alphabet (plus Boxing day)

Comments

Submitted by onemorething on

Lovely. x

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou so much :0)

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

I hadn't really noticed that you are rhyming your couplets, which is a good sign that it is unobtrusive and natural, biut helping the impact.

Holly does seem to last well indoors,bnut I think I prefer  it without the glitter, and decorating the landscape and feeding the birds! But it is a change to fully articifial stuff! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

or that the rhymes are really sloppy! Feel I am making words do complicated yoga poses?

I agree, used to like things all sparkly like magic, but these days so much is fake, real things seem more special

Thankyou so much for reading and commenting always, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Don't feel you have to do rhymes. It can be useful and a challenge, but in the end you'll know what is best for you, and what you feel works in these. They are very cocentrated anyway.. And it can vary from verse to verse! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Turlough on

fussily ossified

I love it that you've used these words together.

Glad to see that you're still going strong.

smiley

Turlough

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou Turlough! That sort of thing comes from reading Rhiannon's stuff, she is a genius at word sounds :0)

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Rhiannon the challenge is to seem as easy as your rhymes do when I read them! Yours seem like the words just came out dancing!

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Holly! Always a reminder of the season, all dressed up with red berries. And your piece was a delight to read.

Jenny.

 

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou Jenny, that's very kind of you :0)