The Curse of Eternal life

Cherry

By Ed Crane

Mon, 09 Dec 2024
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I will trim the wick and light another

candle for the one who passed

leaving me to mourn the endless

fear of emptiness which follows me

hand-in-hand with the weight of loss.

 

Yearning for love turned my heart

to a hollow shell centuries ago but

the bitter taste of watching wives

and children die lingers on my tongue.

Their lives burning bright only to fade

 

before ancient eyes now void of tears. 

Hope is all I carry within my empty

bag of memories. Another new start

with a partner whom I pray will be the

last, and God grants me the gift of death.

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Comments

Submitted by Ed Crane on

Thanks for the cherries eds.

 

Submitted by celticman on

struggle, struggle against the dying of the light. Phew, awright then. Go easy on yourself. We all do. 

 

Submitted by Nolan on

Amusing dilation, I have always felt a peaceful transitition to be best. Pleasent. Why rage on like that for what? Just making the other peoples unhappy &

 

Submitted by Ed Crane on

kind of fascinates me.I guess the first two or three centuries are great but I suppose it would get pretty disturbing after that. 

Cheers

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

Nirvana. Some people dread it, for some the ultimate happiness.

Which side are you on? Tom

 

Submitted by Ed Crane on

it's a permanent state of separation from reality for eternity or from Kurt Cobain's POV permanently off your face. (I wonder if he has been re-born somewhere.)

at night I tend to do breathing exercises to attempt to relax and get off to sleep. If it really works I guess I achieve Nirvana foe a few minutes before dropping off. 

In short Nirvana is not for me and not the kind of eternal life I was writing about.

I suppose the effects of the drug to prevent aging Aldous Huxley wrote about in Brave New World and Frank Herbert in Dune to a certain extent is what I was thinking about,  except that instead of dying looking young one lives for centuries at a fixed age. That IMO would become unbearable after a while and possibly drive one in and out of insanaty.

I wrote this sometime ago. You might find this interesting:

https://www.abctales.com/story/ed-crane/evening-immortal-man

 

Submitted by Tom Brown on

I don't dread the idea of Nirvana. Link looks interesting I might read it.

Tom

 

Submitted by Shannan on

I have found that the pain is the only evidence that I have loved. The deeper the pain, the deeper the love. Everything comes at a cost, and love is the most valuable thing in the world. I hope the memories will move to become the treasures of diamonds and smiles in your heart, like coal does its journey to become a diamond.