Depression

By Edenfalls

Tue, 07 Aug 2012
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6 comments
 

He fell,
through a hole
so dark it was
blacker than space
on a moonless night
with no stars.

He prayed,
but there was no
one there to hear
his prayers,no one
would come for him
this night.

He breathed,
but his pumping
chest would be
felt by only him,
on this night
he was alone.

He screamed
a silent scream
that only he could
hear till his
mind could stand
it no more.

He cried
tears of anger
and pain but
not knowing why
those feelings
were there.

He fought
with the demons
that controlled
his mind until
his fight was over
he fought no more.

He slept
hoping the night
would take away
this new but
familiar bout
of depression.

He woke
It was still there!

Certificate U
Poetry For Everyone
Other Fiction

Comments

Submitted by Yume1254 on
I liked the line 'He fell through a hole'. Summed up for me what depression must feel like. Y.

 

Submitted by Edenfalls on
Thank you very much Yume.

Submitted by jolono on
I liked the start of each of these verses, gradually building until "He slept" but then it all starts again. Moving and original EF.

 

Submitted by Mark Heathcote on
The movie 127 Hours that's what came to my mind reading this good write!

Mark Heathcote

Submitted by Denzella on
Hello Edenfalls, Can identify with this. Thought the whole poem summed up depression very well though particularly liked five and six and then the hope expressed in the pen ultimate but dashed in the last two lines. Excellent. Moya
 

Submitted by Denzella on
But where are you, Edenfalls? I hope this is not how you are feeling. You have friends on ABC who miss you. Moya