End of Term

By harveyjoseph

Mon, 19 Sep 2011
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An image of pupils outside the gates;

Bright blown leaves beneath a tree.

Certificate U
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by MaggieG on
This is a solid piece of writing Next time I would delve a little deeper into your metaphors though, think of something a little less common than leaves Darlin. Enjoyed reading you :)

Submitted by harveyjoseph on
Your right, it is too obvious. There's a poem by Ezra Pound, called In A Station Of The Metro. Its a real gem and I guess, like that, I wanted to try and distil a very simple image into something meaningful in as few words as possible. The Imagist trick - Pound uses petals to describe faces on the underground, but its really haunting... I'll keep at it. Thanks for the commentary.