Overwhelming of the heart.

By Iamber.

Tue, 03 Nov 2009
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My hands run down, and over the little bump that is now taking form of my stomach. My heart overwhelms with this strong ease of love I’ve never quite felt before, a love so strong my heart aches with longing and disbelief. How could they think of this as awful? To think of giving another life, a chance to live, awful? How could they possibly except for me to kill it, or to even give it up? This little bump is now a part of me, a part of who I’ am. I won’t kill it, or give it up. I simply refuse.

They all look down on me, some with pity, some with self disgust, and some with disbelief. I know what their thinking, but I keep my head held high despite it all. They all think the worse of me and they have yet to know me. Not taking the time to understand me, to know me, only to criticize, label and to judge me for what lies under my shirt.

I wish, wish they take a walk in my shoes, and then maybe they'd understand. Understand that it was one night of weakness, a night they just felt right. I don't regret it, not at all, for this thing that lies under my shirt is not a mistake like they all think, but a miracle. A miracle that shall and will change my life, for better or for worst. Not only has this little miracle that lies under my shirt, in my belly, changed my life, but me, as a person.

"Abigail, your barely seventeen." Mom says. "You have the rest of your life ahead of you, do you understand that?"

Among all the other people, my mother is also another who looks down on me, never taking the time to listen, only to judge.

“Yes, mom. I understand.” I say. "But do you?"

And I do understand, but she doesn't. She never has, and she probably never will.

"Are you going to keep it?" Hartley asks, running his hand down and over my stomach.

I stare into his green eyes, and reply with a simple "Yes."

he nods at this, like he knew the answer all along.

And in a way I guess he did, just as I did. I knew from the start I wasn't going to kill or give our little miracle up. What right do I have to play God? To not give this baby inside of me a chance to live? None, none once so ever because everyone, everyone deserves a chance at life, to live, love, to hurt, to grow.

THE END!

-No, I'm not prego. However this was a quick and simple topice I wrote about.

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Comments

Submitted by tcook on
I enjoyed this and found it realistic. You need to develop the character of the author more - give us some clues as to her wider interests and her family life.

Submitted by Iamber. on
Thanks, it was actually a little quciker than attended, like I sort wrote this like 30 minutes which saying the time I normally take to write is pretty fast, but I'll work on it more, thanks (:. <3I'amber.

 

Submitted by tory_del_ricoh on
A nice story. I would echo Tony's thoughts - it is always a good idea to have a full back story for your characters even if you never mention it in the story. That way they come across as real people. You can increase interest by stepping up tension, either internal within the thoughts of the POV character or with dialogue involving other characters. Lastly can I suggest finding a proof reader to pick up the odd spelling and grammatical errors which divert the reader's attention from the story. Hope these few ideas help. Keep on writing.

Submitted by Iamber. on
Okay, I understand their are grammer and spelling mistakes, I will go over them as soon as I can, freshmen in highschool with so and honor classes can make you pretty busy, (; Ha. As for a full back story, so do you mean before she was prego? <3I'amber.

 

Submitted by tory_del_ricoh on
Hi Iamber, I know what you mean by being busy (although I can promise you when you finish High School it will get worse :) - I work all week and have two kids who need a serious taxi service). It pays to take your time though. It took me two weeks to write my last story and another two weeks to edit it until I was happy then another week to get it read by my test readers before I posted. Then again I'm a pedantic old fool. The sorts of things to really watch for are their-there-they're, your-you're, its-it's and so forth. The end result in terms of your stories will be worth it I promise you. As for back story, yes you should have a clear picture in your mind of the character. Who are her family, where does she live, what kind of things does she like? Also the rest of the story even if you don't write it, who was the baby's father, why did she have unprotected sex? When you know your characters and the motivation it makes them much more real.

Submitted by Iamber. on
Ah, I seee, thanks. Haa, I rather stay in high school then! :D Yes, I'll go back and edit it all tho it will take a long time (:. Thanks for the help! <3I'amber.