Let's get critical
By jennifer
Tue, 29 Mar 2011
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Let’s get critical (29th March, 2011)
Stick your rock in my hard place. My headspace
reels with your insults: ‘fuck this’, ‘fuck that’. Do
you like my writing now with the added
expletives you seem to favour so much?
Good stuff, old chaps! Just turn the page if my
age offends you, flattering as it is
to be thought under it. Yes, substance! Now,
that’s more like it, eh? For who gives a toss
about the basic stuff in which I place
my trust? Spit the stones out when you’re done with
sucking on my cherries like they’re sour grapes;
this is comment rape. Can’t you show some love?
I think you’ll find your own words lying dull,
limp and lifeless in your lap. Void and null.
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Hi jennifer, I wondered what
Hi jennifer, I wondered what had happened to you, nice to have you back. Can't quite make this out - it seems to be an explosion of frustration and anger, not quite sure who it's aimed at. I just hope you feel better for having written it.
sue
TVR
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Love the ending to this: I
Love the ending to this:
I think you’ll find your own words lying dull,
limp and lifeless in your lap. Void and null.
Strong stuff, and I think this might run and run and run... does this mean it's 1-1? Thanks for the read. :-)
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This one took me by
This one took me by surprise, seeing as it's filled with such anger. Don't know about the background to this but it reads very well.
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Go Girl! On a site whose
Go Girl! On a site whose motto is 'these are people's dreams upon which you tread so go softly' this kind of rudeness is intolerable. what an unpleasant person 'they' must be.
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The line about 'spitting the
The line about 'spitting the stones' is very appropriate. Nice piece of vitriol, this.
Mark
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