A sign of faith (ip inspired)
By Kahdai
Thu, 05 Aug 2010
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In a smoky, ceiling,
lit thorugh stainedglass,
although mostly dark,
just candlelit, echoes a
slow pipe-organs song.
Now see a line fall down
almost skeletol skinny, tall
a figure brighter than the
flame light, yet shadowed
socket eyes & shaded ribs.
A deep thunderi voice names
a second human voice agrees
sounding sure, yet also afraid
speak to the human form with
shoulderblades arching over.
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Very atmospheric and spooky,
Very atmospheric and spooky, I think you could lose a comma or two in the first verse, they stop the flow. having said that, the first verse is my favourite for the beautiful words you use.
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Is the deep thundering voice
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Is the deep thundering voice from within, I like the imagry on the last line, reminds me of someone hunched over with roserrybeads listening to God,
Until we feel our thoughts our thinking remains unfelt
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