60 - MIDNIGHT

By kheldar

Thu, 12 Aug 2010
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Midnight. In the darkness a struck match flares, bright yellow against the black, quickly replaced by the orange glow of a freshly lit cigarette. Moments later the night-time silence is shattered by the staccato bark of a smoker’s cough. A door swings open, artificial light briefly illuminating a sign on the wall: “Fire Exit only, no access to Oncology Ward”.

Certificate U
Story
THE HUMAN CONDITION
Drama

Comments

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Kheldar, Really like this, you definitely have a way with words. I love the way you express yourself. Jenny.

 

Submitted by kheldar on
Thank you Jenny. With a limit of 60 words every one has to count i guess. David :--)

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Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Khldar, I know exactly what you mean. Jenny.

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Really brilliant take on this week's IP, David! I especially liked: 'staccato bark of a smoker’s cough.' Well done! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by kheldar on
Thanks Magic, it was certainly an interesting exercise to try and keep my ramblings to a minimun. David xxx :--)

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Submitted by darkenwolf on
brilliant; nothing more needs to be said does it?

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Kheldar Great take on (IP) 6o words. Might try?? Later. julie x

Submitted by kheldar on
Thanks Julie, I look forward to seeing your take too. David xxx :--)

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Submitted by shoe on
says a lot more than the words, your descriptive prose comes to the fore brilliantly.

 

Submitted by kheldar on
Thank you so much for that Shirley :--) xxxx

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Submitted by Kahdai on
In as simple an IP starting in mystery & flames in darkness, light in hope, ending with lung cancer. Amazes me what you can make with IPs! K ;)

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by kheldar on
Thanks for that Kahdai, and apologies for the delay in responding. David xx

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Submitted by Kahdai on
no worries :)

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "