A TEAR

By kheldar

Tue, 09 Feb 2010

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18 comments

A tear
Just a tear
Glistening like morning dew
Hanging, unshed
In the corner of his eye.
Bright against the black circle below
Slowly it starts to move
Slowly sliding down his pale cheek
Passing through two-day stubble
Stubble he's too tired to shave.
It reaches his chin
Hovering on the precipice
Hovering just like him.

A tear
Just a tear
No others will follow
None have preceded it.
Its just a tear
Single, solitary, alone
Just like him.
Like him it is fleeting, fragile
Easy to wipe away
Easy to forget
Easy to believe it was never there.

A tear
Just a tear
Proteins and enzymes,
Lipids, metabolites, electrolytes.
It's just a tear
It's his pain, his solitude, his yearning
His yearning to be accepted
His yearning to touch other people
His yearning to be comforted.
It's just a tear
It's just everything….

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Comments

Wow, you wanted to break the

Permalink Submitted by shoe on Tue, 2010-02-09 18:37

Wow, you wanted to break the mould, you certainly did that! this is so heartrending and beautifully written, I'm saddened that it's partly autobiographical but also elated that you have put into such eloquent words, you certainly touched one heart today. :~}xxx

Thanks for your lovely

Permalink Submitted by kheldar on Tue, 2010-02-09 18:43

Thanks for your lovely comments Shirley, I'm pleased you liked it. Thank you also for your kind thought. David xx :--)

This is a magnificent poem

Permalink Submitted by Firebird on Tue, 2010-02-09 19:43

This is a magnificent poem kheldar :) Touched my heart too x Absolutely wonderful poetry :)

Thank you Firebird, I so

Permalink Submitted by kheldar on Tue, 2010-02-09 22:30

Thank you Firebird, I so glad you liked it :--)

Yes - very effective.

Permalink Submitted by rjnewlyn on Tue, 2010-02-09 22:33

Yes - very effective. Definitely a path worth following on this one.

new kheldar Yes. I agree to

Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on Sat, 2010-02-13 22:22

new kheldar Yes. I agree to could feel the emotion. They say men never cry who-ever,good for them. Releases pressure.I know Iv'e had boxes tissues But to much punctuation,ties me up in knots inside. But back again now? If it is put more plainly,like Editor t.cook here kindly did just bit here and there.Be easier me to grasp.But Apostrophe's=done me in.Stating that equal=that girl girl's, of schools,what is hers is girl's and boys =boy's too much for me. julie (:-

Thanks Julie, thanks rj,

Permalink Submitted by kheldar on Tue, 2010-02-09 22:49

Thanks Julie, thanks rj, your comments are always welomed and always appreciated :--)

'Like him it is fleeting,

Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on Wed, 2010-02-10 16:29

'Like him it is fleeting, fragile Easy to wipe away Easy to forget Easy to believe it was never there.' - these lines are so beautiful, David! I really hope you experiment with free verse more often if this is the result ;) And those last two lines just say it all and much more - well done! Magic xxx

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Thanks kahdai, all hugs

Permalink Submitted by kheldar on Tue, 2010-04-20 08:32

Thanks kahdai, all hugs greatfully accepted!!

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Permalink Submitted by Kahdai on Wed, 2010-04-21 13:09

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"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

A TEAR

By kheldar

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Wow, you wanted to break the

Thanks for your lovely

This is a magnificent poem

Thank you Firebird, I so

Yes - very effective.

new kheldar Yes. I agree to

Thanks Julie, thanks rj,

'Like him it is fleeting,

Thanks Rebecca, praise from

Lovely imagery, but sporadic

Hi Jennifer, thanks for your

Beautiful work. It has great

Thank you so much Nolan,

Greetings David! I found

Thank you Paul, both for

I like real emotion poems

Thanks kahdai, all hugs

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