WEARINESS

By kheldar

Fri, 12 Feb 2010
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Weariness
Bone aching, strength sapping weariness.

Weariness like climbing an endless mountain
Weariness like wading through a boundless swamp
Weariness like cutting down trees in an infinite forest
Weariness like reading a thousand Austen novels
Weariness like watching ten score political broadcasts
Weariness like a debilitating disease.

The mountain is in his head
The swamp is in his heart
The forest surrounds his soul
He doesn't read Austen
He won't watch politicians
He has no pyhsical illness.

The weariness remains.

COPYRIGHT D M PAMMENT 12th FEBRUARY 2010

Certificate U
Poem
THE INNER CONDITION
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by shoe on
A very effective structure and I really like the limited punctuation, the statments of fact( rather than emotional respones) are quite hard hitting, brutal almost. I would pray these feelings pass soonest, xx

 

Submitted by kheldar on
Thank you Shirley xx :--)

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Submitted by MistakenMagic on
I agree with Shirley - great structure, love the way it's split into two halves, and *sigh* this poem is how I feel! Thank God it's now half term for me ;) Well done on this one, David! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by kheldar on
Thank you Rebecca, your comments, and indeed praise, always give me a fillip. Sorry to hear that you can relate to it, hope half term does you good. David xx :--)

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Submitted by Cavalcader on
new kheldar Very well described 1000's like this,I know and can identify with most words a cat has nine lives. Yep! well done David! julie x

Submitted by kheldar on
Thanks julie xx

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Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Tremendously effective, this one, David. It had a great impact on me, which is indeed how it is intended to make one feel. Think I'll go and have a lie down in a darkened room, as they say;-) Joking aside, I can only echo Shirley's words and hope the feeling soon passes. Tina x

 

Submitted by kheldar on
Thanks Tina, for both the comment and the care. David xx :--)

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