Seed Head
By lenchenelf
Wed, 17 Jun 2009
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Here lingers the time
softened scent of you;
flowers of fury and fire,
it smarts in memory,
but not the eye.
And how this heart howls.
In the echo of your footsteps,
passing beyond a door
to which I held the key,
there is half heard whisper,
an exclamation mark,
a moment's clarity, of purpose,
belated,
making itself known.
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you need the apostrophe in'a
you need the apostrophe in'a moment's clarity'
Liked the alliterative flowers etc.
Second stanza struck some chord I can't quite explain.
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Nice one Lena. I too felt
Nice one Lena. I too felt something familiar...I know those moments of belated clarity.
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I agree with Ewan regarding
I agree with Ewan regarding the apostrophe...
otherwise, a stunning little poem!
J x
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"Here lingers the
Permalink Submitted by Curse of 222 on
"Here lingers the time
softened scent of you"
i really like these lines...the use of different "textures" works well...time(scope), softened(touch), and scent(smell)...does that make any sense? if it does, great; if it doesn't, well, i enjoyed the poem.
good work.
jason
jason
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I adored the sound of this,
I adored the sound of this, and athte shape of the poem, and the words, they are like a song, 'how the heart howls' and I don't understand how I can love it so much and not understand it. My mind is in abrain fog at the moment, I can't think straight, I may be missing hte meaning , but I love the feel of it.
anipani
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new lenchenelf I love line=
Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on
new lenchenelf I love line= In the echo of your foosteps, passing beyond the door to which I held the key= key to many things? see worth Cherry yes julie.
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