TIGER TIGER FRIDAY NIGHT

By Linda Wigzell Cress

Sun, 20 May 2012
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Tiger Tiger on Friday night
The music's loud, the club is bright;
Some kid has punched a passer-by
Now they all want to have a try!

Out they come beneath dark skies
Some drunk, some drugged – it’s no surprise.
To have a punch-up they aspire
And now some nutter’s set a fire!

A bin is burning; sirens start
Some lads join in – some stand apart.
Police arrive with their big feet
They put the boot in on the street!

Girls scream and vomit down the drain -
No dignity and little brain.
A blade is seen in one boy’s grasp –
Knocked out quick by a copper’s asp.

A black meat wagon soon appears
They chuck ‘em in – now see their tears!
Some cry and beg to be set free
The hard nuts smirk and take a pee.

It’s Tiger Tiger’s turn tonight
But where will be tomorrow’s fight?
Most people will just walk on by –
And shake their heads, and wonder – WHY?

Certificate U
Poem
CROYDON LIFE
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Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
Very neatly written, and structured. I like strong rhyme and rhythm too. Thoughtful, and poignant, and the last line is so perceptive. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Denzella on
Hello Linda, Yes, a very topical poem and as I've said before, I too love strong rhyme although it depends on the subject matter. The only thing I would say is the second line of the final stanza I found a little awkward. I'm no expert but I needed to read where will be rather than 'where'll be...' but have just counted syllables so realize why you have written it that way. As I said, I'm no expert. Despite previous comment a well constructed poem that I enjoyed very much because it is, unfortunately, so pertinent to today's society. I so wish I could rhyme like you. Best wishes Moya
 

Submitted by Linda Wigzell Cress on
Glad u liked it and thanks for commenting Rhiannon. Moya I have taken your comment on board and changed the text. I was glad of your input. I was having trouble with that line and hope this is an improvement. Linda

Linda

Submitted by scratch on
Good effort Linda, it's never easy to sustain a rhyme and even harder to make it seem natural and unstinted; you managed both, well done.

 

Submitted by scratch on
An interesting play on the title too.

 

Submitted by Linda Wigzell Cress on
Thanks Scratch. I do enjoy doing parodies of well-known poems. Staying true to the original rythmn and rhyme scheme is an interesting exercise which I am trying to improve on so any comments/suggestions welcome! Linda

Linda

Submitted by misskelizabeth on
still going clubbing hey. this just sums up tiger tiger in croydon defo. love this, very interesting!