Nostalgia in Bloom
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By littleditty
Mon, 25 Feb 2008
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Book me in to the best hotel you can imagine,
a real dive, somewhere special, it’s unimportant
because I’m coming to get you –
listen out for the gravel under the tyre
of my old Karman Ghia,
revived, for the purpose of this trip -
post-box red, 1965.
I’ll have polished the curves,
packed a picnic under the hood,
and she’ll purr along the open road,
stop, in those traditional neighbourhoods
where I am yours - and you,
you are mine. So book me in my love,
and we’ll go slow enough to see the bees kiss
the pink almond scent of springtime blossom,
slow enough to remember each time
we have felt anything quite like this.
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'to remember each time that
'to remember each time that there was' ???
But this poem seems perfect already.
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Quite delightful, dear
Permalink Submitted by luigi_pagano on
Quite delightful, dear Nicky.
The only change I would possibly implement is to make the last four lines into three as below:
'the pink almond scent of springtime blossom,
slow enough to remember each time
we have felt anything quite like this.'
But it is obviously a personal choice and it is a mere suggestion.
Love, Luigi.
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Yep- I liked this. Only
Permalink Submitted by kim.rooney on
Yep- I liked this.
Only suggestion I'd make is:
'because I’m coming for you' –
It's a bit smoother and emphasises the passion ...for you rather than get you?
Kim Rooney
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perfect , lovely read, and
perfect , lovely read, and the ending is sublime.
anipani
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