Sea blue crystal
By littleditty
Sun, 11 May 2008
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aquamarine sea blue crystal
white light crests roaring air rolling sound
snaking rocks rocking long harmonic breath
tones spilling waves sluicing waterfalls
sweeping volcanic plateau rock pool shore bound surf stretches
leaning impressions traversing stone sarong skin pore cliff
tidal-pull-wash beckoning back to sea jagged shell
rock pool waking life white lightening fireworks sea blue
crystal dreams confetti-ing flowering word shoals
aquamarine to indigo darkening depths
opening violet fathoms peddling stretch runners longing
an azure horizon
arching curves returning light-lapis cloud lines sun tints pink
sunset flamingo golden amber flare lavas wet sand dry
rose golden embers white bubbles inhale
turquoise to malachite.
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Loved 'word shoals'. Nice
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Loved 'word shoals'. Nice imagery. (One thing - since it conjures up such a drama of images whether the almost repetition of 'white light crests' and 'white crested bubbles' was a bit awkward?)
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I like this - try reading it
I like this - try reading it out loud. It reminds me of a the 'sound poetry' of the 70s but occasionally it clunks. Lines 5 and 6 are very difficult to read and other pieces just don't flow as well as they should. But it's very brave and different and for that it gets the bit of fruit.
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Maybe they were pineapple
Maybe they were pineapple clunks! :-)
Lovely, gorgeous, serendipitous images and word combinations.
Turquoise to malachite sounds like somewhere I'd like to start a poem from.
Regards
Ewan
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