A Clean Young Englishman (I.P.)

Cherry

By luigi_pagano

Sun, 07 Feb 2010
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7 comments
 

His neighbours and friends
and others who had met him
were all unanimous
in stating that he was
a clean young Englishman.
Although he was taciturn
and reserved all the time,
people took to him
because to be shy
was not yet a crime.
They were sorry for him
when his wife upped and left
and they understood why
he looked so bereft.
Then a rumour went round
that a body had been found
in his own back garden,
three feet below ground.
But no one would believe
that this nice young man,
clean-cut and so cute,
could possibly conceive,
let alone execute,
such a murderous plan.

© Luigi Pagano 2010

Certificate U
Poem
Cherry ripe
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Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Aha - we did it again, Luigi...two takes on that I.P. Love the twist in yours...and I always thought there were fairies at the bottom of the garden;-) Much enjoyed. You brightened up a grey day, even slightly macabre as your story is. Tina xxx

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on
Yes, dear Tina, as Tony said the title could mean many things and I opted to choose the sinister way. How many times, when a crime is committed, you hear the neighbours say: 'I can't believe it. He was such a nice man, he could not hurt a fly'? Appearances can be so deceptive. I see that we are the first two to answer the challenge. Luigi xxx

 

Submitted by tcook on
I like this very much - and especially the double meaning of execute at the end. Great stuff!

Submitted by luigi_pagano on
Praise indeed, Tony. I am chuffed. Thanks very much.

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new luigi_pagano Congratulations on the cherry! Good poem, bit eerie,well done. Suspense to. and a thriller.We never know. Yes! me to chuffed! so quick email Cherry! But without help and re-done version as asked,cos: It was a try true! poem. grammatically wrong,stanzas 4 lines hard.and punctuation. I stand correcting and all comments. email got in wow.and lovely compliment's but another version if liked,did all corrected I agreed purr-fect now.P-P-P "Pick-Up-A-Penguin". Exclamation marks,commas,semi-colons.Capitals. So Cherry! is really his.What an Editor to help though. Do read T.Cook Tony's "Hope In A Strange corner I have brill: julie x

Submitted by luigi_pagano on
Just a quick note to thank you for the comment, dear Julie and also to congratulate you on your cherry for "Pick-Up-A-Penguin". Luigi x

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new luigi_pagano thankyou so quick amazed thankyou Yours are good and all punctuation. julie x I can't get hang of yet..