Shaken and Stirred
By luigi_pagano
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The doorbell rang:
it was Jack,
the son of our neighbour,
who had come to ask
for his ball back.
He had miskicked it
over our fence
and he apologised
for his offence.
We had a guest
who’d come to dinner.
My husband thought
that it was best
to first serve Martinis
with a choice of nuts.
Just out of interest
I asked who he was.
His name is Bob,
my spouse replied,
and he is my boss.
I want to repay him
for the loss of my job.
By this he’d been shaken
but now he was stirred
into taking revenge.
He’d hired an assassin
dressed as a waiter
who was all in white
and wearing long tails.
The killer approached
the hapless victim,
looked at him for a while
then offered him
a deadly cocktail
with an icy smile.
© Luigi Pagano 2016
I.P. Write a story or poem that uses these phrases: ball back, first serve, just out, all in white
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From the ordinary (we have
From the ordinary (we have neighbours often knocking on our door!) to the 'noir'. Seems to highlight the emptiness of revenge!
I'm glad you've taken a different line to the one I've been thinking about. But I think I'll be splitting a couple of phrases, which you usually avoid, if you can. Rhiannon
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Oh, no, Luigi, I just meant
Oh, no, Luigi, I just meant that I knew I'd be splitting 'ball back' by putting a few words between 'ball' and 'back' etc – I think we once had a discussion about whether one had to stick to the phrase that was given in the IP without any words inserted like that, or not. Rhiannon
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Most definitely an original
Most definitely an original take on the I P Luigi. An imaginative piece of writing.
Jenny. xx
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