Your handwriting

By mcmanaman

Mon, 08 Sep 2014
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The letter you sent broke our hearts and I thought

I wish I'd seen this handwriting more

on Christmas and birthday cards.

 

When we came to visit you were gardening.

It's important to try and make things look nice.

We never knew you but when we needed you

 

you were kind and all this time we never realised

you had such beautiful handwriting.

Certificate PG
Poem
Bridges and Chimneys

Comments

Submitted by scratch on

I like this John.  I'm getting a reunion and wistfulness for 'what might have been'.  I like the coming full-circle theme too.  I'd like there to be a little more of it, the brevity perhaps less of an ally in this instance?

 

Submitted by mcmanaman on

Thanks Scratch - and yes, I think it needs to be longer. Thanks for taking a look!

 

John

Submitted by maisie on

and in places i'm not sure who's voice is who's...  or whose voice is  who's lol.

 

oh whoops  I enjoyed the subtext and the depth of feeling that conveys very well.

maisie angel Guess what?  I'm still alive!

Submitted by lenchenelf on

...short neat rows, (a tidy garden) so much unsaid, so much communicated within the context of the poem as a foil to lack in relationship. How little we know one another.

 

Good stuff John

 

all the best

Lena xx