Thirty Odd Years

Not to be obnoxious, but, er, I don't get it. A lot of this seems lamenting a contingency or riling against something, but there's barely any referent beneath the adjectives and nouns to figure out what you're lamenting or riling against. Why is the earth cursed, the words stupid and the ideologies broken? Why has the heart gone cold from being hot? What was the former self that was erased, what is the new/real me that is emerging and how is it different from or more real than what came before? I guess it's meant to be about a fall from grace, but without further elucidation on what the states of grace and being fallen actually *are*, there's little to take home besides the welter of pretty nouns and adjectives. Sorry if it sounds a bit harsh - that is my sincere opinion.

To John, interesting comment as i didn't feel that it needed anything more explained because the fall, and last line is very good - so the story to take home for me is simply one of broken facades and revival of a more honest self, and in so few words, well done. A good poem, Myndstorm, felt the similes (as and like, love and catacombs) were a little unoriginal, but i have a problem with similes and don't often like them, generally. Cheers for the read x

That was amazing and like Nathan said, I thought it was pretty religious. Quote< "A heart once hot as first time love, now cold like ancient" Amazing job, Broox. - Yaerink1203

Amazing job, Myndstorm! Broox is a little saying when you're smart and talented.

Firstly I'd like to say that this is excellent in my view. I take issue with some of the comments made here. I DO get it, at least I can relate to this piece in the context of my life, my experiences and my understanding and THAT'S ALL ONE CAN DO. I don't think it particularly religious in biblical terms. For me it is (in simplified terms) a look in the mirror and the realization, that my life could have been different, if I had been true to myself; rebelled and lived life for me and not others. In short; if I could have the time over I would not allow myself to be moulded and beaten down, used, abused to the point where I create, almost an alter ego, so that I have lost my true self and sense of self. Just because someone else 'does not get it', does not make a piece irrelevant. I don't need to know 'exactly' what the author is referring too; it is enough that I can relate in some way, even if that does NOT precisely incorporate the authors' blueprint. If we don't like a piece of work for whatever reason, we should move on. If I were buying your house and did not like or agree with the design, I would NOT tear it down; I would move on and find something that I did like. Chris X