Getting personal

Cherry

By Pat G

Wed, 15 Jul 2015
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Waiting has darkened the brilliance

that slipped into a crevasse.

I do not have time for the ice 

to grind its route, open its face. 

 

But now its transient blue 

is where refractions end

and burning cold stops the blood.

This is getting personal; it always does.

 

I sent it on its way, once, 

now I watch from a window;

the cherry petals catch a whim,

land on the coat of a grey-nosed dog

and the greying man dragging its lead.

 

For that I will suffer against the moving sky,

frame by frame through the square of glass,

caught looking unoccupied

in the drifting time, in the drifting time.

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Comments

Submitted by love_writing on

'land on the coat of the grey-nosed dog

and the greying man dragging his lead'

This is a beautiful observation. I love that your poetry evokes thought, leaves me pondering.

love_writing

Submitted by Pat G on

Thank you so much. 

Submitted by VeraClark on

Is this for poetry monthly Pat? It's a framing theme this month. A gorgeous piece and daring to hold back the seasons wreaks punishment. Some startling imagery - majestic - and all contained behind that window. Just fix your title - little typo.

 

Submitted by Pat G on

Thanks for that lovely feedback. Clumsy typo

Submitted by EB on

Magical.

Submitted by Pat G on

Thank you for reading my piece.

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Glad you sorted the title, beautiful chill images, the cherry blossom on the grey dog is so unexpected and a lovely flash of colour - caught looking and not doing, felt a shiver of guilt.

Submitted by Pat G on

Thank you, What a horrible literal that was. I think you probably do a lot of doing Philip. No guilt please.