Pt. 2 For The Infected

By PeterWiggin

Sat, 13 May 2017
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Ghilde

 

Saturday 6:37 AM

               

                “Hey!” David said “Why aren’t you eating, you’re going to be hungry.”

                “I just don’t want to eat” I said. I wanted to say more but I couldn’t. David is my only alive friend and I don’t want to lose him. I’ve known him since I could remember, we used to do some crazy things when we were teenager. I take one last look at him and threw out my food.

                “Hey your mother called again you should answer.” David said than left to his station. That’s another thing that bothers me my mom probably want me to go home with her.

 

Saturday 8:25 AM

               

            Those who are going back to the field you have five minutes the voice said. Well now I need to learn how to really use this gun. Since I came back from the old spacecraft I never wanted to touch that gun.

            When I first came to work, I was ready for almost anything but, after seeing a lot of people die, now that changed the way I think. I walk my way to the small spacecraft. There’s about ten people not including the two driving.

            “Hey.” The girl next to me said. I look at her and see that she looks younger than me.

            “What are you doing here,” I said worried trying to understand why she got herself in this shithole “aren’t you too young to here?”

            “Shh, be quiet…I’m not supposed to be here but I’m trying to find my older brother.” She said.

            Still kind of shocked I said “I’m Kolera”

            “Ghilde”

Saturday 8:57 AM

           After that we just spoke till we got to our new type job. There are three jobs The Hearts, The Spades, and The Clubs. I’m in the other hand an Ace. There are hardly any people that fit the description. Aces go out in the battle field not like soldiers but more as in mages type of stuff. It’s not magic but it’s a stone implanted in your heart that gives you certain powers. Me I could control the weather I could cause a storm if I’m mad or tsunami. 

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Comments

Submitted by airyfairy on

I could do with some more description of the surroundings.  Apart from knowing that they are on a spacecraft or space station I haven't got much idea of the size of it, its layout, whether it's shiny or a bit battered about etc.  Just a few words of description would help the reader get a clearer picture.

I think there's a missed opportunity in the final section when you say they 'just spoke' until they got their new jobs.  This could be a chance for us to find out a bit more about Ghilde from the conversation.

Good build up of tension - the reader knows that whatever is coming next, it's not going to be easy!

Submitted by PeterWiggin on

I really do appreciate you taking your time writing this. Thank you for the support.

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