Burglars beware!

By Rhiannonw

Sat, 13 Mar 2021
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9 comments
 

A burglar should keep away
from homes where children roam and play,
for in the dark what danger lies
to give a  sudden shock, surprise!

Lurking littering cars can trip
under feet that creep, and slip;
somewhere then a toy lights, rings –
and ‘Old Macdonald’s farm …’ it sings!

Piles of bricks by touch will scatter
making such a clanging clatter,
banana skins, or supper’s droppings,
even tired mother’s shopping.

So bungling burglar be aware
that dangerous obstacles lie there
– and even tidy houses may
have hidden pitfalls in your way!

[IP: obstacles]

Certificate U
Poem
Families
Humour
Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by Di_Hard on

This one made me smile :0)

There is a whole other meaning of mine field, remember trying to tidy my son's floor and he kept saying, "No, that's mine!" and putting everything back again!

I liked your second verse very much, particularly "lurking littering"

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Di. Glad to give you a smile. I remember some friends hearing a toy 'sing' in the night that had been left out in the garden! And opening the toy storage room in chapel, and a toy 'speaking' in some way, that no-one had turned off. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by hilary west on

A very good warning, Rhiannon. This was a nice poem full of rhyme and reason.

Hilary  smiley

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you very much, HIlary. Rhianno

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

What a great idea for the I P Rhiannon.

Some great examples of caution written here in your poem. I realize now having creaky floor boards in our house isn't such a bad thing after all.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

!! Thank you, Jenny. Glad you enjoyed! Anything to caution and warn off those tempted to burglary! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by rosaliekempthorne on

Loved it. This was bright and fun, with a nice, smooth rhyme to it.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, much appreicated! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Frances Macaula... on

Just meant to show I liked the poem. 

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