Dreams into … Rising from the … (IP)

By Rhiannonw

Fri, 26 Jul 2013
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11 comments
 

A sports-car that crashes,
a party that trashes,
advice that just lashes:
turn dreams into ashes.

A comrade who bashes,
a sly foe who hatches
plots, mockingly dashes
hope, cold water splashes:
turn dreams into ashes.

A friend who’s reliable,
a project that’s valuable,
hard work that’s sustainable:
good dreams become viable.

From flame and from ash,
a phoenix can rise:
not fame, or just cash,
but something to prize.

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Comments

Submitted by hudsonmoon on
Loved that first verse. Great one for the IP. Rich

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
Thanks, Hudsonmoon, glad you enjoyed it. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by prettyrose on
Hi Rhiannonw :) I hope your well. Love this a really good spin on IP and definatley a win 4 me :)))) Keep Writing Keep Smiling :)

smiley Keep Smiling

Keep Writing xxx

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
Thank you, Prettyrose. Nice to hear from you, and I'm glad you liked this response to the IP. regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on
Unusual and enjoyable, too, Rhiannon. Bee.
Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
Thanks, Bee. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Denzella on
Another good one and so quick off the mark. As usual much enjoyed. More power to your pen! Moya
 

Submitted by Linda Wigzell Cress on
A good read Rhiannon. Linda

Linda

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
Thank you so much Moya, and Linda for your appreciation, and glad it gave you both some enjoyment. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

HI Rhiannon

It is always a surprise, and a sort of treat, to find an old piece of work that nobody else has commented on.

I like your rhyme structure in this poem. You tell all the bad possibilities, and then the possitives, and end up summarising the potential of life.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Jean. Glad you enjoyed, I obviously had fun here playing with the concepts, and words of alliterative rhyming! Rhiannon