Ensnared
By Rhiannonw
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Enticing coyly,
words cloying, oily,
teasing, easing,
sleazily seizing,
trickles of tickly tricking,
trapping
with sugary wrapping,
sweetly lulling,
senses dulling,
sedating
– conscience
unconscious
of guile,
dozing,
losing
awareness
of danger,
and unfairness:
shake up!
wake up!
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Comments
I really like the structure
I really like the structure here, the slow reeling in and the jolt at the end.
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Hi Rhiannonw!
The word play is excellent. Not only does the rhythm catch you. the hook at the end does as well.
There yie are.
Weefatfella.
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Wonderful play on words /
Wonderful play on words / with sounds that gradually morph throughout until the end, ensnared, indeed.
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Hi,
Hi,
This draws us into your web, Rhiannon, and what a wonderful web it is !
Best Wishes,
HW
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Cleverly done Rhiannon, I too
Cleverly done Rhiannon, I too liked your poem.
Jenny.
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Hi Rhiannon
Hi Rhiannon
I really enjoyed the way you played with the words. And the sentiment with the sweet item enticing one is very true in my experience.
Jean
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Those g endings just drip
Those g endings just drip seductively down the page. Enjoyed this.
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