Gloom’s End

By Rhiannonw

Fri, 12 Dec 2014

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Drizzle-drenched decaying day
murky dawn to washed-out grey;
lights appear as fuzzy daubs –
blurry, hazy feeble orbs
dabbed around the midday gloom;
twilight invades each inner room;

deepening dusk the shade increases
creeping in, deep darkness pleases:
contrasting lights now dazzle, cheer
giving pools of colour – drizzle,
mizzle seems to disappear
– invisible, rubbed out by black.

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Hi Rhiannon

Permalink Submitted by jeand on Sat, 2014-12-13 08:56

Hi Rhiannon

I really like your choice of words in this perfect description of our miserable weather. We have thick freezing fog here today. I like the idea of the mizzle rubbed out by the black.

Jean

Jean Day

Thank you, Jean. This got

Permalink Submitted by Rhiannonw on Sat, 2014-12-13 10:10

Thank you, Jean. This got started on a day like it describes as we were preparing to go away for a few days, and the differences the real darkness made on our evening journey. The weather the next few days was mixed, but better, with some very nice. Here it is sunshine and frost at present, but there does seem variation throughout the day as well as across the country at present. Rhiannon

Such a wonderful flow of

Permalink Submitted by Bee on Sat, 2014-12-13 10:53

Such a wonderful flow of words, Rhiannon. I had to read this one aloud to fully appreciate it. It's wonderful!

Bee

Thank you so much for that,

Permalink Submitted by Rhiannonw on Sat, 2014-12-13 11:09

Thank you so much for that, Bee, so glad you thought so. Rhiannon

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Gloom’s End

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Hi Rhiannon

Thank you, Jean. This got

Such a wonderful flow of

Thank you so much for that,

i am really enjoying the

Oh, thank you again, Stephen,

Rhiannon you give a beautiful

! Thanks, Elsie, glad it

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