Hot Air, Cold Showers (IP)

By Rhiannonw

Wed, 04 Jun 2014
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Building castles in the air
– reason doesn’t rule up there –
plans, ideas, little care
how on solid ground they’d fare …

Pseudo-science, cults and ‘isms’,
excited schemes that lead to schisms,
dreams of status, wealth and fame –
a praised, and honoured, well-known name …

Cowboy builds will early flop,
ill-formed scams grind to a stop,
escape to ventures that can thrill –
up in the clouds, then comes a spill …

In the sky we paint a picture,
no principles of architecture,
its airy-fairy mist foundation
comes down to earth: precipitation.

[This week's IP: "There are no rules of architecture for a castle in the clouds"  GK Chesterton]

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Submitted by Rhiannonw on

I'm not able to read and comment much at present as we are having a little holiday, but I'd had a bit of fun with the IP, so thought I'd post this. Rh

 

Submitted by a102866 on

A splendid expose' on the unrealistic dreams and far-fetched schemes of mankind. I like your free-flowing rhyme-scheme. I would probably change "airy fairy" to ethereal or surreal, but that is my selfish preference. Enjoyed reading your well-thought out lines.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, a-, and for your suggestion! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

I enjoyed reading this, and have read some of Chesterton's work.

Jean

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