Servant or Tyrant (IP)

By Rhiannonw

Sat, 01 Nov 2014
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6 comments
 

Rapid chemical reactions,
exothermic oxidations,
complex carbohydrates splitting –
simpler bonds, recombinations,
timber crackling and spitting,
sparks and photons bright emitting,     
flames of gases incandescent,
leaving CO2, smoke, ash:

valued highly when a servant –
warmth in need, and dark extinguished;    
terribly destructive tyrant
when escaping, fleeing, freed –
locust-like, consumes at speed.

[IP:  'Fire']

Certificate U
Poem
Miscellaneous
Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by jeand on

HI Rhiannon

Your first stanza sounds very technical. I liked that. Taking something simple like a fire, and making it as complex and exciting and mysterious as possible.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Jean. I do enjoy mixing up a bit of science with ordinary observations, and playing around with lots of scrunchy consonants! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

I agree with Jean.  There is an energy in the first stanza and philosophy in the second.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Helen, glad you enjoyed the little piece. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Rhiannon,

What a great response to the I.P.  Very cleverly put together and your view of the two sides of  fire  encapsulated in the title.  Another fine piece of work which I very mujch enjoyed reading.

Moya

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks for reading and commenting, Moya. Rhiannon