Elemental

By samanthacampbell123

Wed, 27 Nov 2013
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If I could control any element it’d be the power of fire,

It courses through your veins and rules your desires.

I’d like to set you on fire and watch you burn,

Maybe then you would learn.

You wouldn’t be so selfish and insecure,

You would finally know what I’m fighting for.

I want to see you melt away and see the error of your ways,

Maybe then you would find happier days.

 

You’re full of gluttonous pride

 you built yourself on the errors of mine.

Now you’re running out of time.

The end for you comes near

You cannot hide from me my dear.

I’ll find you, I’ll stalk you down

And then it’ll be you who will have the smile of a clown.

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Submitted by Raef_Boylan on

I liked this piece and thought it was effective, apart from the final line - maybe it's the phrasing more than the actual image but it seemed either cheesy or too cryptic. Is it a reference to sad clowns or false smiles or people who hide behind humour or...? It feels like the narrator is saying "I had the smile of a clown but now you'll have it", yet there's nothing in the poem about this (as far as I can tell). Other than that the poem's an interesting read, gets people wondering the story behind it all as we only get glimpses into this relationship at a distance. Some good, sinister lines throughout. Nice one.