Right the wrong.

By samanthacampbell123

Wed, 27 Nov 2013
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Frustration, it takes control. Jealousy, it makes me cold.

I can’t say a single word because my voice can’t be heard.

Boundaries begun to blur ,you’re here with me and not her.

The flicker in your eye burns bright tonight, we’re past the stage of fright.

A kiss was made before it’s time, we were wrong in our prime.

You said goodbye to all the regret, we’ve built up an emotional debt.

We’re building on the ghosts of the past, aiming to be a contrast.

The lust isn’t strange, let’s make a final change.

Certificate PG
Poem
Love

Comments

Submitted by Raef_Boylan on

The internal rhyme scheme makes this very fast-paced; having each line as a sentence in its own right kept jarring me out of the rhythm though - I felt like a few instances of enjambment would have really helped it flow smoothly. Other than that, it's a nicely direct poem with solid imagery and a strong narrative voice.