A girl named Ana

Cherry

By seashore

Sat, 13 Aug 2011
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25 comments
 

I see her again
in the charity shop

hovering, like an insect
between rails of dresses -

beautiful eyes, a dark
top-knot of hair -

translucent skin
stretched tight over

lovely bones

she could have been me
a long time ago

My familiar, too familiar.

I want to touch her, gently
for fear she might break,

and say, buy your dress
little Ana, but

it won't change you,
only you can do that -

I should know.

Certificate 12
Poem
Miscellaneous

Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
This is beautiful, Coral. So much said in so little. Tina

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Sometimes fate and time works for us. A beautiful expressive poem. Like Tina said- a big message in a few simple words. ;)Pia

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
A very poignant, piece here coral, but like Tina and Pia said, 'so beautifully written.' Jenny.

 

Submitted by seashore on
Tina - thank you so very much.

Submitted by seashore on
Pia - lovely comment, thank you. x

Submitted by seashore on
Thanks so much for the kind words, Jenny. Much appreciated.

Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
This was mindblowingly beautiful, especially in the way you kept everything so subtle and delicate. When I think of "ana" I feel a lot of anger, I was 14 and got completely caught up in several online communities and spent years self destructing when I could have spent that time writing or reading or just generally living. I love everything about this piece and the ending it just reels the reader in even more.

 

Submitted by barryj1 on
Nice!

barryj1

Submitted by seashore on
Maggy - what a lovely comment, thank you so much. Thanks also for sharing your own experiences. Maybe, just maybe, what you went through at 14 has helped you to be the creative person you are now... just a thought.

Submitted by seashore on
Thanks so much Barry! Thanks also to the cherry-pickers, you've made my day.

Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
I hope so as I'm sure your own experiences made you the talented artistic person you clearly are! The cherry was more than deserved.

 

Submitted by seashore on
Thanks again Maggy. Believe me I've struggled with that self-destruct button most of my life but but console myself with the fact that those negative experiences do tend to breed creativity. I can see it happening with you and you are using it to a maximum at a young age (I left it much later) so you go girl!

Submitted by seashore on
I know exactly where you're coming from CelenaGaia, especially when you say your `mind is still locked in its own cage' - great way of putting it. Thank you so much for reading and leaving such an insightful comment - much appreciated.

Submitted by Geoffrey on
Floods this time, not helped by the sensitive comments from your many followers.

Submitted by seashore on
Oh bless you....xx

Submitted by shoe on
Wonderful, so delicate but cuts like a scalpel! there is a brilliant book called 'life size' by Jenefer Shute, which deals with anorexia in a very insightful way, I think you might like it if you ever get the chance to read it.

 

Submitted by seashore on
Thanks for the lovely comment shoe - and also for the book recommendation. I will make a note..

Submitted by lenchenelf on
Quiet observation, fine detail, succint; enjoyed reading very much. all the very best lena xx

 

Submitted by seashore on
Thank you for reading and commenting, Lena - I very much appreciate your feedback. xx

Submitted by RachelPatricia on
It has all been said, Coral - just brilliant, lovely to have you back and many congrats on the cherries :) Rachel xx

Submitted by seashore on
Many, many thanks Rachel. xx

Submitted by rask_balavoine on
You capture a moment so beautifully here.

Rask

Submitted by seashore on
Thank you so much for reading and for the lovely comment!

Submitted by phase2 on
This is wonderful, too, you are so clever, I'd never have thought of writing about this. I loved going to the Oxfam where my parents live, but I was like a butterfly catcher, never brave enough to wear the beautiful things I was lucky enough to find sometimes (this was before ebay - expect no one would give those kinds of clothes away now)

 

Submitted by seashore on
Really appreciate you reading this, phase 2, and for the lovely comment!