Balloon
By shoe
Wed, 14 Apr 2010
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"Oh," You say,
"He died, last June,
I didn't tell you,
You would only have come down
for the funeral"
I would have, I would...
There is 200 miles of cable
between your ear and mine,
I hear every straining, humming,
taut inch of it.
The string feels thin,
I roll it between my fingers,
I'm supposed to let go,
release the balloon into the sky,
watch it bob and soar
until it's out of sight.
You ask about the weather.
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I love the simplicity of
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
I love the simplicity of this, shirley! Really like the imagery in this stanza too:
'There is 200 miles of cable
between your ear and mine,
I hear every straining, humming,
taut inch of it.'
There's a sadness and beauty in what this poem doesn't expicitly say too - a great one for reading between the lines ;)
Magic xxx
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I agree with Magic's every
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
I agree with Magic's every word;-) Certainly much here to be left to the reader's interpretation and so much poignancy in the poem itself. Much enjoyed.
Tina x
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Lovely poem shoe, a bit
Lovely poem shoe, a bit curious, I like that. K xx
"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "
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I agree with all of the
I agree with all of the above, a really simple and beautiful poem.
I loved this stanza;
"There is 200 miles of cable
between your ear and mine,
I hear every straining, humming,
taut inch of it."
Beeme xx
k.
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Yes, the images are powerful
Yes, the images are powerful ones and very evocative of a sort of wistful melancholy (well that's what I got anyway).
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Yet again you expertly give
Yet again you expertly give us a little bit of information taht leaves us imagining the greater story.
As they say, always keep 'em wanting more.
david xx
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Love the imagery and the
Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Love the imagery and the ambiguity; different and all the more delightful for it.
Chris ;) XXX
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I love this! The shift from
Permalink Submitted by staticshakedown on
I love this! The shift from conversation to the balloon and back was great—whimsical melancholy, I'll say.
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