No surrender
By shoe
Tue, 19 Jan 2010
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Crack the fragile skull
Spoon out the scrambled brain,
Wholesome soldiers are lacerated,
Masticated, bones left on the plate,
Weetabix drown like kittens
In your o% fat leukocytes,
Weakly, I wave a white flag
Placing myself in your sights,
But you are planning your next strategy,
On your blackberry,
“I’ve got SO much to do”
As you pencil me in
For a phone call, or maybe a tweet
The claxon calls, to arms, you go
Mortally wounded
I clear the carnage
Of what used to be us, my love.
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really enjoyed this shoe. I
Permalink Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
really enjoyed this shoe. I love the breakfast description, and if it's autobiographical in any way, can I suggest you put the blackberry in the bowl with the weetabix tomorrow morning?
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I'm please I found a window
I'm please I found a window in my diary for this one shoe - for four lines there I thought you'd morphed into some 'guts & glory' war correspondent xx :--)
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Just great..'o% fat
Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Just great..'o% fat leukocytes' gotta try some of that. Brilliant piece; short and thoroughly enjoyable, class act Shirley.;)
Chris XXX
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Totally agree with everyone;
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Totally agree with everyone; that breakfast imagery is brilliant ;) Brutal but with a great comic edge, Shirley. Well done!
Magic xxx
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I agree with all of the
I agree with all of the above. I love the last lines and these lines especially;
'Masticated, bones left on the plate,'
'Weetabix drown like kittens'
I really enjoyed :-)
Beeme xx
k.
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What more is there to say,
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
What more is there to say, Shirley, except you have always such a fresh way of looking at things. I like Cheerios, as well as my portion of 5 and I also liked this;-)
Tina
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like this alot you got a lot
Permalink Submitted by exogenesis on
like this alot you got a lot in your poem , like it
b.i.
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