Amoureuse

Cherry

By Silver Spun Sand

Sat, 31 Jul 2010
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23 comments
 

If I could keep
just one moment in time
it would be this –
right here, right now.

A glass beside our bed
quivers in the moonlight,
brimful with liquid silver;

arms above her head
she lies, like branches
of a cherry tree, heavy
with blossom.

Tangled sheets bind my feet
but I am a willing prisoner,
and through an open window
I can hear the stars sing.

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Submitted by jennifer on
Oh, so beautiful. These lines: 'brimful with liquid silver' and 'I can hear the stars sing' Just perfect. J x

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Jennifer - thank you, so very much. So pleased you enjoyed. It truly made my day;-) Tina x

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Lovely to see a shorter poem from you, Tina! This one is absolutely beautiful - and I agree with Jen, that last line is just superb! Well done on the cherry ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Thank you, Magic;-) Glad you noticed. Small is beautiful, or so I used to tell my daughter. Pleased that you enjoyed. Tina xxx

 

Submitted by Jacquelineann on
This is so beautiful and visual, you found a touch of warmth, that I felt in your words, lovely! x

Jax

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Jacqueline - really appreciate your words. Thank you so much. Glad you enjoyed;-) Tina x

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
New Silver-Spun-Sand Can't find the words but agree with all, the beautiful and very very deep,with excellent words and beauty portrayed. Well deserved.Cherry! Arms above her head she lies, like branches of a cherry tree, heavy with blossom. julie xx

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Julie - thank you;-) And you did find the words - quite beautifully. Tina xx

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
New Silver-Spun-Sand Hello! Thankyou lovely comment. Just a quickie,guess what is running to-day name of the horse of your poem Amoureuse, I didn't know the meaning? Amour is love,isn't it.Can't find word. Hope ok resting bit to-day.Hope your ok. julie xx

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Hi again, Julie. You are right. 'Amour' means love and 'amoureuse' simply means 'in love'. Tina xx

 

Submitted by kheldar on
Hi Tina, As others before me have said, this poem is truly beautiful. I can't pick a favourite or exceptional line because every line, every stanza, is exceptional. A tree full of cherries would not suffice. David xxx

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Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
I really appreciate your lovely comment, David. Thank you;-) We have a cherry tree in our garden, but the birds always get them before I do, unfortunately. Tina xxx

 

Submitted by rjnewlyn on
I agree. I don't think there's much to add. The second stanza is my favourite (capturing a hugeness of a moment in so few words, the way great poetry ought to) but it's a tough choice. Rob

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Rob - thanks so very much. Glad you enjoyed and I really appreciate your kind comment. Tina

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on
Tina, you don't need a Muse: you are the Muse of poetry. Another enchanting poem that emphasises your talent. Luigi xxx

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Luigi - how kind you are;-) Thank you - so very much. Hope you have a peaceful weekend. Tina xxx

 

Submitted by JamesF on
This is lovely, Tina, your work has a wonderful purity and clarity about it and the meaning deepens over time...reminds me of some of the poems of Carol Ann Duffy's book Rapture, which I loved x

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
James - thank you for reading and taking the trouble to comment so favourably. Carol Ann Duffy I really admire but I haven't yet dipped into Rapture, which I must certainly rectify. Tina;-)x

 

Submitted by Kahdai on
Hear the stars sing! Ah Tina thats in love surely! I like lots to this poem, for once one part I dont think is right: Tangled sheets bind my feet but I am a willing prisoner, still just dont change it :) xx

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Kahdai - thank you for reading and for your thoughts. It is always interesting to hear what people think about the things that we write and I greatly value your words. Have a good week;-) Tina xxx

 

Submitted by Kahdai on
Wow thanks ^^ xx

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by Beeme on
Sorry I'm so late Tina! This is stunning, such a beautiful love poem with amazing images. I love the idea of the stars singing outside! ( wish I had though of that one ;) ) Beeme xx

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Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Many thanks, Beeme...glad you enjoyed. Tina xx